I liked and agree with everything, though my standard has been to leave my number with my name in front of the message rather than after the message. My logic is that if the listener has to go back to get writing materials they won't have to listen to the entire message to get my number.
Of course, this has grown from listening to 10 minute voice mails where the number is left in a rush as the very end. I get very frustrated listening to the meandering twice, or thrice to get the number. I often get distracted waiting for the number, and miss it. While I don't seem to have the problem of rushing my number, or leaving meandering messages, I have adjusted my own approach because of it.
In the proposed less than 1 minute message (Thank you Thank you Thank you) the order becomes much less of an issue. In fact, with a short message I do prefer the number at the end as by then I'll know if I need it or not.
p.s. An extremely intelligent and helpful member of these forums indicated an issue with leaving her number in a rush. The following solution occurred to me: Area Code - Pause - Prefix - Pause - 2 numbers - Pause - 2 numbers. Basically, don't speak more than 3 numbers without a pause. Pause in logical places.